Would You Hire This Person?

I just ran across a post on LinkedIn that read “i am looking to expand my network. i am going to accept all invitations.” The person who posted it has a title of “Administrative Supporter”.

So what’s wrong with that? Let’s leave the whole “connect with anyone and everyone” conversation for another day. My point on this one is the punctuation and grammar. Sentences start with a capital letter. The word “I” is always capitalized. She made two mistakes in one letter. Not once, but twice.

What is an “Administrative Supporter”? Now I’m starting to think that English is not her first language. So now you’re thinking, cut her some slack. But I can’t do that. This is her online image. She is looking for more business or she wouldn’t be online, trying to connect with anyone who will do it. It makes me physically cringe.

The third challenge is her use of passive voice. I used to speak and write that way, but once it was pointed out to me it is now one of my pet peeves. She’s “going to” do something? Or she’s doing it?

As my friend Bob Nichols points out in his book, Remember The Ice, there is power in your articulation. Ask a friend, hire a writer, do something to make sure you are delivering the message you want to convey. You never know how many customers you lose, how many opportunities pass you by, with poor use of the written language. You know who you are…fix it! Remember, You Are Always Doing A Commercial!

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